Is this a good or bad poem?

Okay so I am 16 and I have never written a poem in my life, but I was bored so I thought I would. Please tell me if you think it is good or not, if you don’t think it is good, please tell me what I should do to revise it. Thanks

It seems like you have a good start, but really, your age has nothing to do with it. If you ever get serious, most publishers don’t care if you’re 16 or 61. Telling your age doesn’t gain points with me.

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